Out of the many thrillers and horror novels I’ve been listening to over the past couple of months, I finally found one that gave a solid deliverance on the “creep” factor. My definition of the creep factor is when the reader is going along in the story and suddenly, out of nowhere, the reader gives a slight shudder and thinks, “Ooh, that’s creepy.” It’s a subtle thing, but I think it’s one of the most powerful elements in fiction meant to put someone on edge.
In another post, I mentioned how fond I’m becoming of creature horror, or, as it also seems to be categorized, “dark fantasy”. I only borrowed The Last Word from the library because it was about an author taking revenge on a reader who gave his book a 1-star review. Being a writer, I thought it might be funny to read about an author going unhinged because of a bad review. (I mean, no author likes getting those kind of reviews, but we usually just cry about it in the writing groups. We don’t actually try to kill the reader.)
There were parts of the book where I did chuckle. The back-and-forth between the reader and author about “good” writing was hilarious, especially when the reader fogged up a window and wrote the word “amateur” on it. He was right outside the house, watching and waiting for the right moment to kill her, but the fact that she was willing to stop everything to keep up with their argument about his bad writing was funny.
This book, however, is not a comedy. It is a full-on thriller. In the prologue, we’re given the initial interaction between the reader and the author. The reader 1-stars his most recent book, he asks her to take the review down, she refuses, he’s like “I won’t ask you again” in a way that lets you know he’s ready to go after her, and she responds with a “good”. This is the beginning of the back-and-forth dialogue that’s picked up later in the story.
Chapter 1 is where the first creepy moment came up. I’ve been exploring how the author managed to successfully deliver on the creep factor, especially so early in the story. The author did not rely on anything in-your-face obvious. He went with the subtle path, and that is what I’d like to be able to do. Right after the prologue, the reader is going in-and-out of sleep, and she thinks someone is watching her. But when she fully rouses herself out of sleep, no one is there. Then she searches the house and verifies she’s alone. Then we are given the fact that she’s housesitting in a remote area along the beach. The nearest house is about a quarter of a mile away. Most of the time when authors give a play-by-play account of a character’s actions in their stories, I get bored, but this author managed to make every action a revelation into “who” she is and “what” she wants. These things taught me something about her personality and her background that I would not have figured out otherwise, and that made those play-by-play accounts effective. The author also did this in snippets throughout the story so as not to info dump on me.
So anyway, early on, we establish that this reader is a loner whose only companion is a dog. Her goal is to disappear from the rest of the world. She does communicate with one other person, and that is the owner of the house that is a quarter of a mile away. The two houses all have huge windows so they can easily see into each others’ places. They use telescopes to communicate via white board where they write messages. Usually, they play hangman games. On this particular day in Chapter 1, the owner of the other house glances over at her place, jumps up, and hurries to write on the white board, “Someone is with you.” or something along that line. Given the guy she thought was watching her while she slept, that message and the guy’s startled reaction (jumping out of his chair) creeped me out. The author set the foundation for the creep factor at the beginning of Chapter 1. He didn’t rush into it. It just slips in after her very calm and relaxing morning. That is effective.
She does not believe him. Apparently, this character in the other house has a habit of pulling pranks on her, so she has a good reason not look over her shoulder. She laughs it off with a “nice try” message on her board. He replies that he’s serious. There’s a little more to the conversation, and toward the end, he writes, “Killer is still behind you by the way,” and that was the second creep factor.
Of course, nothing happens to her at this point. If it did, we would lose the creep factor. It’s important that the build up has time to develop, and this author did that very well. When things really ramp up, we are ready for it. The author does slip in something about her not being sure what’s real or what’s not, so there were times when I wondered if she was imagining some of this stuff that was happening to her. Then you are left wondering who you can trust and who you can’t because more characters slip into the story as it progresses.
Another thing the author did really well to make you wonder what exactly was real was alternating between the reader’s narrative (where we get her point of view of events) and a “nonfiction” book written well after the events happens (where we get an “unknown” character’s perspective of events). (I hope that makes sense.) I really enjoyed this back-and-forth between her point of view and the unknown character’s point of view. They contradicted each other in certain places. For example, the reader says she wrote the word “amateur” on the window. The unknown character reported that she wrote, “please don’t kill me” on the window. (Given how she questioned her sanity early in the book, we really do wonder who is right.) I have never read a story that took that approach to building up the suspense like this before, and I think that made the thriller element of this story very effective.
In the end, we do know what was real and what wasn’t, so the author didn’t leave us hanging. He answered all the questions he posed. This story was really well done, and I’ll continue to dissect different elements of it in the future as I strive to make my own writing better.







